Can you help me out?
I just finished the first round of composition on a piece.

Here it (was). (7 minutes plus)

Do you have any thoughts on how to make it better?
Do you have an idea for a title?

Email me! kevin@incompetech.com

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[Saturday Morning]

Okay, I got some nice feedback. Working on fixing some clarity in parts. If you still have something to say - keep the comments coming (I just took the original link down because I don't want too many repeats of the same criticisms that are already being fixed).